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Tuesday 1 September 2020

Year 11 DVC l Rendering Internal

AS91066

Kaiden Mcdonald-Ringdahl

https://www.nzqa.govt.nz/nqfdocs/ncea-resource/achievements/2019/as91066.pdf

Here is a photo of my bottle rendering that I have been working on:

In DVC, the last term we were designing bottles and this year we have been learning how to render a bottle. We were rendering these bottles in 3 different materials: Solid plastic, stainless steel and clear plastic.

I liked how we could design how we wanted our bottle to look but I didn't like actually merging the colours together and making shadows because I found them quite difficult to do.

Give me any thoughts and feedback about my bottles.

Friday 31 July 2020

Year 11 English l Describing Pathos, Logos and Ethos

Pathos: 

Pathos is something that evokes sadness. 
It can be used in an argument to draw the audience in and help it connect with the argument
An example of this is when your driving with your mum past Maccas and she says that there's food at home which brings great sadness.

Logos:

Logos is the meaning of reason and judgement.
It can be used in an argument that appeals to the audience's logic or reason.
An example of this is when a speaker makes historical events relevant to their argument

Ethos:

Ethos is a characteristic spirit of a culture, era, or community.
It can be used as a means of convincing an audience through the authority or credibility of the persuader.
An example of this is when something like an ad about toothpaste coming up and it mentioned that 9/10 dentists use it.

Wednesday 4 March 2020

Year 11 English l Write a better sentence

Use the matrix to improve your work by showing or rewriting 6 out of the 12 options in your writing

The Very Short Sentence:

"I really am invisible!"

The Simple Sentence:

"I was as furious as a rhino"

The W-Start Sentence:

"When 3 hours had passed"

Red, White, and Blue:

"He invented something amazing, life-changing, and unbelievable"

The Adverb Start:

"Suddenly, the sound went really loud"

The -ING Start:

"Getting sick of those 2, I had trespassed them"

Year 11 English l Post Creative Writing Tasks

Spoiler alert!

The 6 tasks I have completed for my creative writing:

1. Make the character introductions memorable:

So for this, I wrote: "Hi, my name is Micheal Gavrilla, I've got ginger hair, I'm tall, I'm NZ European, I love watching movies, I'm great at maths, I was one of the smartest people in my maths class, I love chicken burgers, I like watching the news and I also work at Burger King."

2. Insert strong words:

Here are 3 examples of this:

1. "The only thing I hate is when these 2 mischievous school kids named Logan and Levi"
2. "I went back inside and pushed the shiny light blue button on the chip so I could be clearly visible again"
3. "He told me that he had invented some kind of complex device"

3. Replace weak words with stronger ones:

Here are 3 examples of this:

1. Before: "It was time to go home" After: "It was time to go to Darryl's small house on Postnet street"
2. Before: "I felt pain spread across my arm" After: ""I felt a sharp sting spread across my arm"
3. Before: "I got so excited about the chip..." After: "I got so hyped up about the chip..."

4. Deleting weak or unnecessary words:

Here are 3 examples of this:

1. Before: "Ronald Crump's polls were rising but I don't care much about politics so I just ignored it" After: "Ronald Crump's polls were rising but that's irrelevant so I just ignored it"
2. Before: "I don't have enough money to get my own house because I am a bit broke" After: "I don't have enough money to get my own house"
3. Before: "This made it so I was actually visible again" After: "This caused me to become visible again"

5. The 5 SENSES

Here are 3 examples of this:

Hear: "I started hearing a faint noise, the noise of someone speaking to me"
Smell: I get to smell the crisp, amazing burgers being made in the kitchen"
Feel: "I felt a sharp sting spreading across my arm and through my entire body"

6. Figurative Language for the Sense of Sight

Here are 3 examples of this:

Simile: "I was as furious as a rhino at this moment"
Personification: I don't think the drink machines would be feeling good about this right now"
Simile: "He seemed as confused as a cat trying to catch a laser

Wednesday 19 February 2020

Year 11 English l Language Features

Language Features: Simile
What it means: Comparing 2 things, saying something is like or as something else.
Teachers example: She was as fast as a rocket
My example: He was as tough as a rock

Language features: Metaphor
What it means: comparing 2 things, saying something is something else
Teachers example: The moon was a drop of silver in the night sky
My example: The sun was a blinding yellow light in the clear blue skies

Language features: Personification
What it means: Giving objects or non-human things human characteristics
Teachers example: The wind was breathing in my ear
My example: The frisbee flew like a bird

Language features: Alliteration
What it means: The repetition of letter sounds
Teachers example: Peter picked his pears politely from the park
My example: Nathan knitted nine neckties

Language features: Hyperbole
What it means: An exaggeration
Teachers example: I've told her that a million times!
My example: You've borrowed thousands of dollars from me

Language features: Assonance
What it means: Repetition of vowel sounds
Teachers example: How now brown cow. The cart went to the market for the chance to barter
My example: I used my phone to control a drone that flew into a cone

Language features: Onomatopoeia
What it means: Words that sound like what they describe
Teachers example: Splash, crash, boom, plop etc.
My example: The firework went BOOM and it lit up the night sky

Language features: Understatement
What it means: The presentation of something as being smaller or less good or important than it really is
Teachers example: (When a hurricane is coming towards you) "I see there's a bit of a breeze out here"
My example: (When you're standing next to lava) "It's a bit warm over here"

Language features: Consonance
What it means: The use of the repetition of consonants or consonant patterns as a rhyming device
Teachers example: Clair was caught drinking beer at the fair
My example: "I start the day by going to the church to pray and by the way, I saw a horse eating hay"

Language features: Pun
What it means: A joke exploiting the different possible meanings of a word or the fact that there are words which sound alike but have different meanings
Teachers example: "The Railway Society reception was an informal party of people of all stations (excuse the pun) in life
My example: This game had so much wrong with it on so many levels

Language features: Anaphora
What it means: (an-AFF-or-a) is starting each sentence with the same words as the ones before.  This will be most useful in creative pieces like speeches, songs and poems.  You could build it in from the beginning, or you could go through in the second draft and change the first sentence of every paragraph.  It’ll help if the words you’re repeating are the central idea or dominant metaphor of your piece.
Teachers example: It’s so preposterously easy to use anaphora.  It’s so preposterously easy to pick some words.  It’s so preposterously easy to repeat them.  Everyone can do it.  Everyone can start a sentence the same way.  It takes no skill.  It takes….. I could go on like this all day.
My example: "It's not easy doing work. It's not easy waking up in the morning. It's not easy going to school."

Language features: Epistrophe
What it means: This will be useful for songwriting, poetry, and speechwriting. When you end each sentence with the same word, that's epistrophe.
Teachers example: When each clause has the same words at the end, that’s epistrophe.  When you finish each paragraph with the same word, that’s epistrophe.  Even when it’s a whole phrase or a whole sentence that you repeat, it’s still, providing the repetition comes at the end, epistrophe.
My example: "I did good. I actually did really good. I can't believe that I did this good."

Language features: Chiasmus
What it means: The words of the first half of a sentence are mirrored in the second.  They are deliberately turned back to front and then repeated.
Teachers example: John F Kennedy told America that “Mankind must put an end to war, or war will put an end to mankind."
My example: “If we are on Earth, we are humans; if we are humans, we are on Earth"

Language features: Epizeuxis
What it means: Epizeuxis (pronounced ep-ee-ZOOX-is) is repeating a word immediately using exactly the same meaning.  Simple.  Simple.  Simple.  Be warned, though: epizeuxis is like a nuclear bomb.  It really works, but it’s overkill if you do it more than once.
Teachers example: The first rule of Fight Club is you do not talk about Fight Club.  The second rule of Fight Club is you do not talk about Fight Club.
My example: The instructions were simple simple, simple.